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PostPosted: Wed Dec 03, 2008 12:39 pm    Post subject: Mistakes Reply with quote

Thats right, here it is, your first teaser for Book 2. I'm still looking for a name for the series (like Lord of the rings before each book name) so if something comes to mind, I am interested to hear it.

Beginnings was chosen as the name for Book 1, because it was the beginning. Mistakes was likewise chosen for Book 2, because it foreshadows a mistake that Battalia makes. That's why I love this series so much. I want nothing more to portray Battalia as perfect. Always choosing the best path. But since I am basing him on myself, I'm far from perfect and often make mistakes, so when I came up with the plot for book 2, the title sprang to life on it's own. There was many questions created by the ending of Beginnings, and most of them will be answered here, in Mistakes. But if there is something missing, please feel free to contact me. Sometimes I get so busy spinning a story that we all can get lost in that I jump around too much. That said, please sit back, and enjoy this small teaser of whats to come...
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 03, 2008 12:40 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Taya was cramming as much as she could into two suitcases when she heard the door swoosh open behind her.

"You didn't..." Pyro said. The dismay in his voice tugged at her heart, but she knew this was inevitable. She turned around slowly, but didn't make eye contact with him.

"I gave away someones life so that we all could live. It was a mistake. They tried to kill us anyway. Now I know I gave away my only true love for nothing. There is nothing left for me here."

"So what? Your joining Deliverance?" After the PGF ships left, a Deliverance ship came into the system and declared all planets that were under PGF control were now liberated. Macabeth jumped at this opportunity and welcomed the Deliverance ships with open arms. It wasn't long before there was a registration building set-up asking Macabethian citizens to join Deliverance and fight against PGF's tyranny. "I thought they didn't have any more positions left for pilots."

"They don't. I signed up for training to pilot a Meka." This threw Pyro into a rage.

"Your going to get yourself killed! and for who? You can't do this!"

"I can order someone to die for me, but I can't use this life to make sure nobody else has to make that same decision? Look at yourself. You piloted one all your life."

"And look at me! I'm a wreck. I'm not good for anything but fighting anymore."

"This universe has little peace left in it. What would you have me do, sit on my ass and watch everyone else fight?"

"Anything but throw your life away!"

"I can't do that."

"You know that Battalia wasn't the only one that loved you..."

"Thanks pyro, but it's too late for love." She finished packing and walked past him and out the door, leaving him behind.
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PostPosted: Mon Jan 05, 2009 2:37 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Battalia woke to a very odd but familiar sensation. It felt like someone was skinning him alive. His eyes snapped open but he couldn't move is neck at all. He tried to talk but his jaw was similarly bound.

"Ah, your awake. Just a few more minutes and we will be finished. Your lucky to be alive you know, that as quite a beating you took." Someone said out of view. Battalia rolled his eyes and closed them again and resigned himself to his thoughts as the painful scraping continued.

Quite an ingenious medical treatment you know. The solution-

"I don't care what it does." Battalia snapped"I just want to know what the hell happened." AMI didn't say anything afterward and left him to his own thoughts as the sound of scraping continued.

"Alright, we can do this the easy way or the hard way. You have been deemed dangerous to PGF personnel and I would like to save myself from having to revive you again so just to let you know we have a guard armed with a weapon watching with orders to shoot should he deem you a threat. Nothing to incapacitate you, just kill. You ready?" Battalia felt the straps restraining his head loosen and his jaw freed. He craned his neck to look at the doctor and gave him his coldest stare.

"I'm more than dangerous to PGF. Kill me now and save yourself the trouble." The doctor sighed.

"And that's my cue that I get to wheel you around on this table until your deemed not a threat. Alex would like a word with you at the very least.
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PostPosted: Mon Jan 05, 2009 3:16 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Richard peered through the window again. It had to be his family. There was no other possibility. He swore under his breath again. He was going to kill him, but he didn't want to do it in front of his wife and kids, but Richard had run out of time. He had hoped to kill them all the traitors with his own rapier but he couldn't muster the strength to walk in to the diner and do so in front of a family. He pulled out his silenced pistol and centered it on the mans head. He cursed again and lowered hi aim to the mans chest. It wasn't a guaranteed kill anymore but would spare the family from too much gore. He pulled the trigger, turned and ran. Screams and children crying filled the air behind him.
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PostPosted: Mon Jan 12, 2009 10:56 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Battalia only gave in to the doctors last chance because of AMI's plea for him to do so. He was handed a pair of PGF standard issue cloths since his old were destroyed beyond repair. The cloths were a surprisingly good fit, but he hated them for the colors and the insignia on his right shoulder. He tried to rip it off but laughter from the guard on his third attempt stopped him.

"just come with us so we can get this over with. I have better things to be doing." The guard said in a low growl. Battalia gave up and walked with his escort to through the ship. It seemed to be similarly built like The Sky with the same claustrophobicly tight corridors and PGF blue and white colouring. Battalia tried to keep track of their general direction which seemed to be up and forward. He couldn't tell any other directions as the view ports he could see through were just filled with empty space. His escort came to an abrupt halt infront of a pair of very intricitly designed and detailed double doors.

"This is as far as we go. What is on the other side of those doors is for you r ears only." Said the guard as he spun on his heels and walked back down the sterile corridor. Battalia stood for a few seconds and admired the doors but AMI grew impatient and urged him to go through them. With a smile on his face he stood for a few more heartbeats looking at the door before walking up to them. They opened with the customary hiss of hydraulics and granted him passage inside them. Inside was a rounding man sitting in a chair centered in the room with several people standing around him. Battalia guessed he was the General of the ship. As the doors behind him hissed shut the conversation in the room cut to whispers. Even the General turned his chair to face him.

"Ah, at long last we meet!" He said with a booming voice.
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PostPosted: Tue Jan 20, 2009 4:30 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

"I think you have me mistaken for someone else. It really is best if you just drop me off somewhere on your way to wherever." Battalia said as he walked towards the general, everyone around him slowly walked back or looked at him with astonishment. "oh, sir." he added with a smirk. The General laughed and it was one of those genuine booming laughter that filled an entire room with his voice, but nobody else dare even smile.

"When I read your profile I didn't think you could live up to it, but this is a good start. Let me introduce myself. I'm General Leth, but you can call me Alex. So tell me, do you know what happened back above Macabeth?" He said, the smile still remaining on his lips. Battalia broke eye contact and looked off to the side.

"No."

"Then who are you to be giving me advice? Seven good men gave their lives up for you that night, so you can live. You dishonor their sacrifice." His smile was all but gone now. Battalia fixed him with a cold stare this time.

"I didn't ask for this."

"No, you didn't. I saved you because I need you. You have something not many people have around here. That is a good head on your shoulders and you know how to pilot a Meka. Knowing this, you have a choice. You can walk out that door and pursue your own future, or you can stay and listen to what I have to ask. You will be of course paid for your services, but you won't be part of the PGF army, simply hired to make sure things get done. You will have no authority, but Trent here will be your contact. If you need something, let him know. What I need to know is are you going to help me or not."

"PGF is a sic and corrupt cesspool of sin, why would I want to help you?"

"NO!" Alex said as he slammed his fist down on the arm of the chair which creaked and moaned under the force. "PGF... is not what it used to be. We were desperate, and accepted anyone willing to fight, and with the absence of Affliction forces at the end of the war, there was an entire galaxy ready for pirates and other warlords to prey upon. A lot of people were promoted to positions that they should not have, but it doesn't mean we are all bad, and that's where you come in. I need you to investigate us. I need an outside opinion of us. An unbiased assessment of the PGF core. Are you willing to do this for me?"

"I'll see what I can do, but I'm going to need some sort of clearance and supplies then."

"It has all been taken care of. Are you in?"

"Fine. But don't expect that I'm not going to sugar coat the truth."

"That's all I can ask. Your first assignment is on Aldus. There has been some reports of new technology found there, and we have a treaty with the ERSA forces stationed there. Make sure it is being held, and report back to me on the commanding officer there."
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PostPosted: Mon Jan 26, 2009 9:46 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Mistakes is currently on hold, I'm going to be re-working Beginnings to perfection.
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